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  • I've long had a problem with characters that  fail to make choices that guide the story,  

  • either by creating problematic  situations that must be solved,  

  • or by solving situations themselves. Part of this  comes down to how out-of-touch I can feel with  

  • a story that doesn't actually involve our main  characters, the eyes we see the world through,  

  • to any sizable degree. But it can be even more  frustrating when character choices that would  

  • otherwise define their identities are left  out in favor of warping the world around  

  • them instead to create a specific emotional  response in the reader. Now, I would argue that  

  • these are separate problems, but they are also  connected by their source: character-led choices.

  • On a structural level, there isreason why choices are so important,  

  • why it is imperative that you give the main  characters of your story agency in their  

  • world and over their journey. In a fictional  world, one of the top priorities is connecting  

  • the audience to the characters and storylineand making sure there is some sort of journey  

  • that will take place through those avenues for the  audience to follow: character arcs and plotlines.  

  • The main character you see the world through  is usually, and in Warriors, is always,  

  • the character through which the journey is  supposed to funnel. We see the journey with  

  • them and see the character and / or world changeIf a character doesn't make choices at all,  

  • or if their choices are completely obsolete to  the character or plot journeys, the character  

  • themselves become obsolete. We could remove them  from the story, replacing them with an omniscient  

  • third person perspective, and the story would  still progress as usual. We are not present to  

  • see the changes, why they were made, or the mighty  triumphs someone must have taken to win the day,  

  • and so the story, to us, either feels confusingdisconnected, or ultimately meaningless.

  • On this level, I actually find the four  protagonists of Omen of the Stars to be some  

  • of the worst offenders. Jayfeather, LionblazeIvypool, and Dovewing all do make choices,  

  • and those choices allow us to see who they are as  characters. Jayfeather argues with Starclan and  

  • yet gets frantically determined at the prospect  of a death he might be able to prevent. Lionblaze  

  • pines endlessly over his rocky relationship  with Cinderheart, but has no hesitation in  

  • battle to the point that he kills RussetfurIvypool lets her jealousy over Dovewing fester  

  • even in the face of counterevidence, but also  seeks out other close relationships that she  

  • is endlessly apologetic for like Blossomfall and  Hawkfrost. And Dovewing reaches out to and tries  

  • to befriend cats everywhere, but also has limits  around cats putting her on a pedestal or using  

  • her as a tool. As much as we come to understand  these characters though, none of them affect the  

  • overall plot. None of the three's powers were  used to defeat the Dark Forest, Ivypool never  

  • saw anything that gave intel the three didn't know  already, the entire plot with Starclan illogically  

  • breaking up and Jayfeather bringing them back  together was insanely short and ultimately had no  

  • effect on the Dark Forest or their final battleand their final struggle to find the fourth cat  

  • was completely meaningless since they only found  the fourth cat, Firestar, after he did his duty,  

  • and Firestar would have fought just as hard  whether or not he was in another prophecy. With  

  • or without the protagonists of the arc, the Dark  Forest's rise to power, battle with the clans, and  

  • defeat would go exactly the same way. These cats  make no impact on the plot we're supposed to be  

  • following, and as such we end up feeling detached  from the plot of Omen of the Stars as a whole.

  • However you can still walk away, and in factstill did walk away, enjoying Omen of the Stars  

  • because I got to see characters being themselves  as the plot passed them by in the background. I  

  • enjoyed the people I spent the time with even if  I didn't care even a bit about what the events of  

  • that time were. This is why I consider the second  level on which choices are necessary for your  

  • characters to be even more important, as it has  to do with the very identity of the characters.  

  • The choices I will be considering here are much  smaller and subtler, but ten times as important.

  • A fictional character is difficult to  define at first. In nearly all cases,  

  • you won't come out of the first chapter  being able to list off all of their traits,  

  • and starting a complete story by directly  telling the reader what your characters are  

  • like is an approach that lacks a lot of subtlety  and prevents the reader from gleaning that  

  • information for themselves during their own  interpretations. Putting that option aside,  

  • though, you as an author still needway to communicate who a character is  

  • and why they do the things they do, along with  hopefully giving an opportunity for development  

  • and growth over the course of a story. For  this purpose, one of the most useful tools  

  • a writer has to employ is choice, which in  this case is synonymous with individuality.

  • Choices, unlike something like backstorydefine who a character is now. With every  

  • choice a character makes, that choice should  be made for a reason, and ideally, over time,  

  • readers should come to understand what motivates  them to make each choice. With each subsequent  

  • choice they are given, and each response to those  choices, the reader is able to build a larger and  

  • richer picture of who a character is, even if  they aren't doing that process consciously.

  • Considering how abstract this is, I'd like to  provide an example. Say that a character, let's  

  • call them Bob, is our brand new protagonist. On  the first page, what do you know about Bob? Well,  

  • nothing, of course. But as you read, you see  that Bob's mother licks him firmly on the head  

  • and asks him to not leave the nursery again while  she goes out. Bob gives a heavy sigh and agrees,  

  • crashing limply down onto his nest while silently  crying out about his boredom. Now you know that  

  • Bob has a mother who cares about him but can't  be with him all of the time, that Bob is likely  

  • a kit, that Bob has previously left the nursery  without consent, and that he doesn't like having  

  • to stay in the nursery. Perhaps in a couple of  chapters, Bob is made an apprentice and he is  

  • the only one in this ceremony. Perhaps, at this  point, Bob immediately goes to speak with the  

  • older apprentices as he takes joy in the fact that  he won't be stuck alone anymore. Now we not only  

  • know that Bob is an only child and that he enjoys  company, but we can look back to his first moment  

  • and see that the reason, the motivation behind  him not enjoying the nursery or wanting to leave  

  • it could be about his solitude, since he didn't  enjoy being the only cat his age in one boring  

  • room for moons on end. Each chapter that moves  forward, we learn more about Bob in the moment,  

  • but can also use what we learn to look back and  inform our understanding of Bob's earlier actions,  

  • allowing us to build a fuller picture of who Bob  is. Without Bob being given the opportunity to  

  • make choices, to leave the nursery rather than  making up games for himself or asking the elders  

  • for stories, to immediately greet the older  apprentices rather than asking to go out on  

  • patrol or getting to know his mentor, we wouldn't  be able to learn who he is. If the entire world,  

  • regardless of previous characterizationrelentlessly praised or berated or ignored him,  

  • and all of Bob's own characterization  was just feeling happy or sad about how  

  • the world treated him, we would know nothing  about Bob except that he is in that situation.

  • So speaking of character choices being left  out in favor of making the situation *around*  

  • the characters as sad as possible, it's time  to discuss Violetshine and Shadowsight. Both  

  • main characters had extremely hard livesand the Shadowclans that surrounded each of  

  • them were cruel, often illogical communities  with little to no understanding or sympathy  

  • for them. Violetshine and Shadowsight  both faced bullying and continuous scorn  

  • from their clanmates even when it made no  sense at all for them to feel that way,  

  • in Violetshine's case because Shadowclan *choseand even *fought* to have her in their clan and  

  • then spent the rest of her life treating her like  a waste of fresh-kill, and in Shadowsight's case  

  • because it was plainly clear that Shadowsight was  just reporting messages as he saw them and both  

  • the leaders and other medicine cats agreed with  the interpretation they came to so he is in no  

  • way at fault for Ashfur's rise to power. Bullyingeven illogical bullying, is something that people,  

  • unfortunately, truly do go through, thoughSo why do I dislike these characters so much?

  • Well, it's mainly because these charactersstatus as bully victims or outcasts in their  

  • clans is used as a replacement for establishment  of their personalities or development of their  

  • characters. Violetshine acted as a camera whose  motivations were never kept consistent long  

  • enough to establish any trait about her. Her  bullying made her...mad about being bullied,  

  • but it didn't affect her future performance  in any notable way. She joined the Kin because  

  • she liked Needletail, not because she disliked  Shadowclan after they scorned her for her whole  

  • life. In fact, she decided to return to them  of her own free will before the Kin took over,  

  • as if their bullying never really mattered. Its  only purpose was making us feel sorry for her,  

  • while leaving out any motivations for either  her or her clanmates to do the things they did.  

  • Shadowsight was always an unsure medicine cat who  did his best to share and follow his visions since  

  • that's what his culture encourages everyone in  his position to do. When he was bullied for doing  

  • just that, it didn't do much other than make him  feel slightly worse than he already felt about  

  • himself. Really, aside from being a standard  medicine cat and dying for part of one book,  

  • I can't think of anything notable he did *at alluntil *after* all the bullying in Darkness Within,  

  • when he sort of decided to free Ashfur without any  motivation for that choice either and proceeded to  

  • immediately regret it andhypothetically worked  against it for the remaining two books, while  

  • still not doing anything notable for any of his  chapters. In both cases, I genuinely couldn't name  

  • more than one or two *personality* rather than  situational traits for either of them, especially  

  • not ones that are represented consistently across  their arcs. Violetshine ismean to her sister but  

  • clingy to Needletail? So stubborn I guess? But  no, she also joins the Kin very easily and is  

  • pretty quickly convinced to fight back against  the Kin or rejoin Shadowclan, her tormentors,  

  • if she feels like it. Uh, inconsistently holds  grudges then, maybe? Shadowsight meanwhilewell,  

  • he sure is hesitant and insecure, most of the  time, except when he occasionally gets bursts  

  • of determination or certainly. I couldn't tell  you why these moments pop up when they do, it's  

  • mostly a “needed for the plottype thing. And  he's generally a nice guyand that might be it.

  • Late-Sunny coming in here after this video has  already been done for a while. There's another  

  • reason that I failed to mention in here but that  is definitely important and becomes especially  

  • so in the most recent example that is beginning  to happen in A Starless Clan. Having the entire  

  • clan senselessly attack the protagonist also rids  the authors of any need to justify either side  

  • of the argument. The protagonists are often too  broken down by having bullying on all sides and  

  • aren't prepared to offer any counterarguments to  the problems their clans have with them and with  

  • so many cats in agreement, the cats in the  mob aren't pressured to add points to their  

  • argument at all. Violetshine just doesn't belong  here. No reasons need be given. Shadowsight just  

  • doesn't deserve to be a medicine cat and is at  fault for Bramblestar's death. No reasons need  

  • be given. And yes, small spoilers for A Starless  Clan, Nightheart simply is disgracing his family  

  • and Firestar. No reasons need be given. We as  fans can think of reasons for either side and  

  • even argue why certain characters might have  reason to take up one argument or another,  

  • but the characters in the story  never take any of those arguments,  

  • because they don't have to. These three gray-area  situations are never and will never be discussed,  

  • because the framing of the story doesn't leave  room for it. The two sides in examination aren't  

  • those who want to follow a prophecy versus those  who find Shadowclan to already be too crowded,  

  • or those who think Shadowsight was just doing  his job versus those who resent him for not  

  • catching Ashfur's manipulations earlier, or  those who think Nightheart should be allowed  

  • to choose his own identity versus those who  consider upholding legacy to be an important  

  • tradition. The only sides left are the bully  victim and the many, many bullies. And that is  

  • a black and white situation that the readers are  expected to sympathize with and that no author or  

  • editor has to justify the poor morality of. OkayBack to your regularly scheduled programming.

  • Now, I should be clear that bullying itself  isn't the problem. Crookedstar was also bullied  

  • in his super edition, not on as wide a scale, but  certainly made uncomfortable by most of the clan.  

  • However, unlike Violetshine or Shadowsight, the  writing used this situation as a way to explore  

  • more of who he is, and as a defining motivation  for his actions. His initial name change and  

  • being held back from being an apprentice made him  want to leave the clan to stay with the barn cats  

  • instead who didn't mind him and could help him  learn to use his crooked jaw. When he came back,  

  • his scars and the treatment he got for them were  still the motivation for him to work harder,  

  • train not only with his own mentor, Cedarpelt, but  also with Mapleshade in his dreams, and become the  

  • best warrior he possibly could to prove himself  to his clan, something he never stopped doing  

  • through to the end of his book. His ambition  and determination were elements of his character  

  • shown off even before his injury, so using them  in conjunction with his reactions to adversity  

  • led to a character who made choice after choice  and became both Riverclan's leader and a Dark  

  • Forest trainee as a result. His bullying isn't  all that he is. And, perhaps most importantly,  

  • each of his clanmates had individual reactions  to his injuries and felt like real characters  

  • with their own lives rather than a rabidfaceless mob, so the bullying that he did  

  • receive felt significantly more real, like each  of those clanmates had as much agency as he did.

  • Giving your characters meaningful choices to make  and allowing those to both be entwined in the  

  • plot and guide how your characters' personalities  are shown off is so intrinsic to writing any good  

  • story. There really isn't a way I can stress this  enough. If your characters don't care about the  

  • plot, your readers won't either. And if the  readers don't know who your characters are,  

  • they won't even care about them, no matter how sad  you make their situation. The deal is already done  

  • for every character I discussed in this video, but  perhaps you can take these lessons into your own  

  • writing, or let it guide how you think about  upcoming character portrayals in the series.

  • Thank you for watching, and always remember  that every choice you make defines who you are.

I've long had a problem with characters that  fail to make choices that guide the story,  

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