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  • So let's look at question two.

  • In this question students need to

  • describe the advantages and disadvantages of somebody studying

  • overseas. We've looked before at what students need to do to answer this

  • question so now let's look at the answer that one student gave to see how it would do

  • in the IELTS exam. This is their answer and if we think first of all about the

  • treatment

  • the first thing we think around aids word length and in terms of word length

  • this is over 300 words so its founding which we know it's long enough we think

  • about if they understand the question and in the introduction they explain

  • what they're testing is going to be about and importantly they do so using

  • different words to the question if you repeat words and phrases directive from

  • the question they will not be counted as part of your word count when we look at

  • this as saying we can also see in the conclusion that they have a clear answer

  • to the question they describe the advantages and disadvantages and most

  • importantly they give their opinion which is something that the question was

  • asking for if we look at the essay more detail we can see in the second

  • paragraph that identifying different advantages and in this paragraph they

  • talk about disadvantages

  • because there's a clear answer to the question this june is on target for

  • their score of 6.5 if we move on to think about coherence and cohesion one

  • of the first things we'd look at his paragraph thing to make sure every idea

  • has its own and that the paragraphs are a good length in this question that

  • might be a slight problem with the third paragraph because it isn't quite as long

  • or fully developed as it should be

  • however each paragraph has a very clear purpose and addresses a different part

  • of the question so that's good when we look at the answer there's a logic to it

  • as an organization that we can see when you read this answer that first of all

  • there soon is going to talk about the advanced features beautiful looking at

  • the disadvantages and then giving their opinion

  • looking a little more closely we can see that the shoe is making use of cohesive

  • devices of language that connects ideas together what also important is that

  • they're making use of language which references items so they don't have to

  • repeat things

  • this is necessary to show ideas all connected and it lets you talk about

  • something without using the same language all the time looking at this

  • it's clear that this student would be on target in terms of coherence and

  • cohesion the next right here to look at is but calculating the lexical resource

  • and generally this answer has a high level of vocabulary there's a long

  • sophisticated language and also the use of nice terms like experience culture

  • shock take the initiative and it's important to have these chunks of

  • language these fraser's of words that commonly used together what's also good

  • about this and it is a variety of language so when the shoe talks about

  • loneliness they can also talk about a feeling of being isolated and this use

  • of synonyms is very important to show the language that you have it is good to

  • show as much of your vocabulary as possible if you make a mistake that

  • doesn't have to be a bad thing in IL you still get benefit but trying to use

  • sophisticated vocabulary looking at this there's a nice range of vocabulary

  • that's good right and the some high-level vocabulary in use and so this

  • would also be on target

  • the final category to think about is grandma now when we look at this very

  • good grammatical items there's also a mistake where the student hasn't really

  • gone bank and looks at their this is an example of a sentence where the student

  • had two different ideas and put them in the same sentence

  • the problem comes at the end where they say he can be isolating that doesn't

  • dramatically fit with the sentence and they would have had to have edited it

  • perhaps to say something like when settling into a new country which can be

  • isolating so this is a problem however there are still quite a few examples of

  • sophisticated language use this first one is a good use

  • own parallel structures they seized when we used the same structure throughout

  • the sentence

  • we have an increasing student independence which is now widening of

  • cultural experience which is a noun and formation of a more holistic person

  • which is another now so we have three

  • used in panel there's also use old models may could might and what's nice

  • that this is a passive model we have future continuous and also sophisticated

  • sent instructions like this one so even though their mistakes in this generally

  • the control and accuracy of the grandma is very did so again this student would

  • be on target when we look at the answer it's a clear answer to the question

  • which is well organized and users accurate grammar and vocabulary be so we

  • understand everything that the student is trying to say as they say would be on

  • target for the 6.5 this June would like

So let's look at question two.

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