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How To Get Ideas And Plan Your Essays
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What we're going to do is look at about 5 or 6 IELTS Task 2 questions.
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And together we're going to work through what we're going to write for each paragraph.
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I'm going to be quite quick but I just want to show you the process I use for when I'm
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writing my essays.
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And I do write a lot of essays 'cause I find out
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the more I write, the easier it gets (logically).
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And of course being a native speaker, I don't have to check it.
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Although, I will admit
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my spelling isn't fantastic.
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However, I got Microsoft Word and stuff like that for some of the other problems (usually
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the vowels and stuff).
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But anyway, let's get going.
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First of all, good luck to Shuko and Hamilian.
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The 2 online students that are gonna take the test.
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I've been working with them trying to get ideas working on the speaking,
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get ideas for essays,
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working on their grammar,
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and I�m pretty certain they're going to do it.
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So we'll see.
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I'll let you know how it goes.
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But I'm pretty certain they can do it.
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They've been working quite hard (especially Shuko... she never stop sending me essays).
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But it's good.
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Let's get started.
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So I've decided to take question from about 3 or 4 subjects.
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Globalization
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Education
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and Equality.
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Let's get started.
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First question:
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"Do you think it is better for students to work before the university study?"
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"Why"
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"Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice."
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Now then...
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For this essay, I decided "Yes, it is better."
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For the 1st paragraph I said:
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"The student would get practical experience,"
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"they get contacts,"
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"they get on-the-job skills."
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That's very good collocation to use "on-the-job skills."
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And then to prove my point, I give an example and I say,
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"Studies from the UK Government show that graduates with work experience are twice as
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likely to find employment."
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So it's quite believable, that example.
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And of course, these are just rough ideas but it's a solid idea.
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And I'm going to say "yes" from beginning to the end.
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I'm not going to write a discussive essay because there's no need to.
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I agree totally with what the question says.
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Then for question 2, once again "yes."
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A second reason.
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So I'll say, "Can you continue the first argument?"
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I'll say, "It's better preparation, chance to improve social skills, close the gap between
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academia and the private sector..."
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Also more collocations there: "social skills," and "private sector."
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"It also helps the student to commit..."
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"It also helps the student before they commit to a long term plan."
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So it helps them decide.
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Then for my example, I said:
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"One out of six students will change their higher education course while at university."
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If you actually look at the presentation on a slideshow or on the video on YouTube,
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You'll see that the notes, they're not full sentences.
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It's just a few bullet points, random ideas, all put together.
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And I've used the shortened version (I didn't say "university" I just put "uni").
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'Cause at this stage, my grammar doesn't have to be perfect.
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The spelling doesn't have to be perfect.
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I'm just getting ideas and building the essay.
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In this podcast, we're just going to look at paragraph 1 and paragraph 2.
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'Cause introductions and conclusions can be written after you've got your main ideas for
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your body paragraphs.
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... And that's where you pick up most points.
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Next question...
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Also related to education...
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"Some people believe that children should do organized activities in their free time
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while others believe that children should be free to do what they want to do in their
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free time."
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Not the best written question there but anyway...
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"Which viewpoint do you agree with?"
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"Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer."
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Let's go.
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Quickly, I'm writing down ideas.
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I'm going to say:
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"There's lots of benefits in letting the mind wonder."
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"Children can express themselves."
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"They can find themselves."
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"They can do what they prefer and excel at."
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Like I said, ideas.
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Ideas.
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Just getting them down.
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Maybe I'll use 2 of these in the actual body paragraph.
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Then I've got an example... or a believable example
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(I invented this but it doesn't matter.)
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(I invented this but it's believable.)
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"Recent studies show 12% of school students dislike physical education, therefore if sports
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were chosen it be unfair to this minority."
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Yeah?
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That's believable.
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That's believable.
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It's about 12%.
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I remember at school, there's a few that didn�t' like sports, so it's believable.
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I'm not saying, "99% or all students hate physical activity" because that would just
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be insanely inaccurate.
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And also, notice the vocabulary I used.
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I've used the collocations of course, "physical education"
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but I also used, "dislike" I didn't say "hate" or "absolutely disgust" because that is very
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strong language.
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And this is an academic essay so we have to limit it a little bit.
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We cannot be so absolute.
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Now, my second paragraph focuses on the cost and what would be necessary.
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Basically, the disadvantages.
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And so I'm saying that:
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"It'd be costly for the school."
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"They might need time to plan it."
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"They might need to buy possible equipment."
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And then for my example, I would say:
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"Furthermore studies show that the brain operates better after a distraction from a structured
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task such as studying."
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Then finish the sentence with "Therefore recreational time from the students' schedule would have
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detrimental effects."
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Also, not the more specific vocabulary.
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I'm talking about "schedule"
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"recreational times"
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This is good vocabulary because it's vocabulary only related to education or specially related
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to education.
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So it shows the examiner I've got rich vocabulary.
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Next question.
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"Many people say that globalization and the growing number of multinational companies
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have a negative effect on the environment."
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"to what extent to you agree or disagree."
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"Use specific reasons and examples to support your position."
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So what's the crooks of the question?
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"That globalization and multinational companies are damaging the environment.
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Having a negative effect."
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So first: Globalization, definitely damaging the environment.
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I could be long.
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I could give a long and complex, more accurate answer saying that:
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"Globalization is increasing the cost of world economic resources which is therefore increasing
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the price of substitute products (or rival products) such as ecological energy from wind
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farms... blah, blah, blah..."
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But the examiner doesn't care.
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Yeah?
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He wants to see just something logical.
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So I'm just going to take simple route.
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Something that's going to be easy to explain and where I've got some good vocabulary.
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Let's go.
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This is my idea:
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"Increased interaction between countries"
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"Leads to increase goods and services traded"
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"Which means more production"
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"Therefore more resource extraction" (such as mining)...
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Maybe I'll remove that in my final sentence 'cause then I could just talk about the example,
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which would be:
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"For example, in China (largely considered the workshop of the world), in many cities
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air pollution masks are needed to commute around the city center."
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So therefore, I've proved my point.
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I said that globalization is damaging the environment.
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Quite simple.
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Believable example.
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And it's easy to follow.
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Next, I have to go back to the question 'cause I wanted to check.
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The 2nd point was about multinationals.
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Once again, I've taken the simple route.
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It says,
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"Multinationals are responsible for negative effects in the environment."
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It's quite a big statement to say that.
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But I'm just gonna say "yes."
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I'm just going to say "yes" because it's simple.
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I'm getting points for my language, not for the quality of my ideas.
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So I will say,
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"Yes, multinationals do increase pollution."
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"Globalization requires global solutions (these can have drastic consequences if accidents
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happen)."
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Of course I'm going to expand it a little bit but that's the main part of my argument.
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It says, "A negative effect in the environment" in the question.
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Here, I've put "increased pollution" more or less is saying."
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I've put "destroyed the local ecosystem" in my example.
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In my example, I talk about:
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BP
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The Gulf of Mexico
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The oil pill (a few years ago)
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... destroyed the local system.
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It proves my point.
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And if you've caught them before, I said "drastic consequences" just another collocation there.
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Once again, get in a solid plan together,
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put in down the points,
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thinking of an example that will correspond,
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then I've got 2 solid paragraphs.
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Now, all I have to do is my conclusion and my introduction.
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Which I can draw from the body paragraphs.
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Next question:
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"Parents want to achieve balance between family career but only a few manage to achieve it."
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"What do you think is the reason?"
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"Discuss possible solutions and provide examples."
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Now, we've got the problem and a possible solution.
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So the first paragraph will be what is the reason why there is a challenge trying to
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find the balance between family and career.
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My second paragraph, I will suggest solutions.
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This is very important.
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I've paid attention to the question and each paragraph will correspond
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to the question,
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to the parts of the question,
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structures of the question,
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and therefore I'm going to pick up points for Task Response.
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Let's have a look.
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"The first reason why there is an imbalance..."
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Notice as well, I used the negative form of the verb.
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It says, "It's difficult to achieve a balance," so I said, "The reason for the imbalance..."
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"... is because there's increased competition in the work place,"
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"changes in society,"
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"increase in the amount of working mothers put strain on the family..."
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As you can see, I've got quite a few points here.
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So I might cut them down and only use the ones most relevant to my example.
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And my example (once again) is completely invented but it's believable.
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Here it is:
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"Studies in the United States (US) show that families with two full-time parents are more
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likely to separate."
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"Therefore, this shows that finding the balance is incredibly difficult."
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This is the reason.
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This is what I think.
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They're more likely to separate.
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Full time, lots of stress, it's going to be difficult.
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Paragraph two, possible solutions.
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Possible solutions.
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Here, I've just gone for something that fitted...
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I came with my example first, and then I thought "Okay, I can go with this route."
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First I thought of France having a 35-hour working week.
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(Which is quite outrageous if you're coming from the UK and from the United States to
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even do this.)
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(Due to the culture that we have there in the UK).
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So the solution would be:
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Regulations from the government.
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Government could legislate for increasing maternity leave.
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More flexible working practices.
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Reduced working week.
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For example, "In France, the government proposed and implemented a 35-hour working week."
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Also, lot of collocations there.
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"maternity leave"
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"flexible working practices"
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"working week"
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Use these.
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Once you get in special vocabulary that you're only going to find talking about this topic.
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So we've done a few questions about globalization, also touching on the environment.
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We've done a few about education.
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Now, we're going to do one about...
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Well, another one about equality.
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Let's go.
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"Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care.