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  • Hello everyone! Welcome to my channel! This is Dori I am a teacher of english and in today's

  • video we will talk about the basic plan you need to follow for Academic Writing task 1.

  • Ok, so in a previous video we talked about the strategy you need to follow by reading

  • the information and the details given to you by the topic, so if you haven't watched that

  • video yet you might want to check this out first in this link over here. Now, all you

  • need for this task is just a simple plan of 3-4 paragraphs because mainly all you need

  • to do is to write a basic summary of the data that you are given in the diagram. Please

  • remember that because lots of my students have the tendency to make this task a little

  • bit more difficult than it actually is. So, in your first paragraph which is your introduction,

  • all you need to do is to just paraphrase the topic, that is, use your own words in order

  • to say the same thing by stating the main points. For example, So, if you remember the

  • writing task that we used the previous time, it looked like that and let's read the topic

  • a little bit to remember it "the chart below shows the annual profit made by four major international companies

  • in 2011-12-13-14" and then we have the names of the companies which are represented here with colours.

  • Ok so, the first thing we do we read the topic as we said the previous time. So, every time we ask

  • "What does the chart show?" "What are the main points?" 1.) the annual profit made by

  • what? 2.) by four major international companies 3.) in the course of four years. So,

  • here is our small plan we can see here our introduction we always ask ourselves "what does the chart

  • show?" and our notes, just the main points briefly, -the annual profit-of four companies-four

  • years, ok? So, in order to paraphrase the previous topic a little bit here's what we

  • can do in just 3 lines or so. "This chart/diagram follows the performance of four major international

  • companies in terms of their annual income over the course of four years: 2011- 2014."

  • So, as you can see, I am just stating the main points and I have actually paraphrased

  • a little bit the topic given. Ok? This is what you need to do in your introduction.

  • Ok, that's it! Our introduction will be ready in no time especially if you familiarise yourself

  • with paraphrasing introductions. Now, about your next paragraph all you need to do here

  • is to state the most important points and information you can see in the diagram, I

  • know that this can be a little bit overwhelming at first, but just start from the most obvious

  • information you see. For example, start from the highest values and then from the lowest

  • values and then you can move on with stable performances and things like that, for example,

  • So then in our summary we start by noting all this information that stands out, for

  • example we can see that in 2011 over here the annual profit of Grow&Flow was the lowest,

  • the yellow colour over here. However, what else can we see that really really stands

  • out? It's that in 2014 ABC10 company's profits skyrocketed in 2014, MegaMarket was the most

  • profitable in 2011, it has a big difference from the rest but then, it dropped a little

  • bit and then went up again, these are the things that you first notice and these are

  • the things that you are going to put in your summary. So, for the next paragraph, over

  • here the first actual paragraph that we're going to write, it is about our observations

  • about what we can see about the information that we see in the diagram. So, our notes

  • briefly could be -the annual profit of Grow&Flow was the lowest in 2011- the profits of ABC10

  • skyrocketed in 2014 - over here- and MegaMarket was the most profitable in 2011 but then...-

  • and we continue by stating what we see. These are just examples of notes just to give you

  • an idea what you can write in this paragraph and how you can phrase what you actually see

  • in the picture. This is what you do, you include the summary of the diagram in this paragraph.

  • In this case, in our example, you just describe each company and the performance over the

  • years by starting from the most exceptional data, the most exceptional information in

  • order to help you, ok? Now, in the next paragraph you start making comparisons, you don't have

  • to state each and every thing NO by no means no, don't do that! Just the most important

  • points that you think that should be mentioned. Just be clear and specific and choose the

  • most important obvious correlations according to your own opinion. So, your plan notes for

  • the next paragraph could look like that: So, you can say that Grow&Flow, the profits of

  • Grow&Flow and TodayGlobal's have been decreased in 2014, you can also say that from 2012-2014

  • MegaMarket and Grow&Flow are closely aligned, as you can see, not much of a difference and

  • of course you can also say that with the exception of ABC10 over here, that steadily increases

  • reaching each peak in 2014 all the rest have significantly dropped in terms of profit,

  • ok? In your next paragraph, second paragraph you can start with comparisons, so mainly

  • these are just examples, -the profits of Grow&Flow and TodayGlobal decreased in 2014 -from 2011

  • to 2014 the profits of MegaMarket and Grow&Flow are closely aligned and- with the exception

  • of ABC10, all the rest have significantly dropped in terms of profit. Ok, so these are

  • just notes of just stating what you can see by comparing the information, just that, ok?

  • you do not have to write everything, just what you consider important. Always be simple,

  • you have no idea what you can gain with that. I mean, lots of students think that if their

  • phrasing is too simple they are going to lose marks for it but really the only way that

  • you can lose marks is convoluted phrasing, complex phrasing that is, that leads to grammatical

  • and syntactical mistakes. So, what I like to say, "Better be simple, than sorry". And

  • lastly, you have your conclusion, mainly what you can state in your conclusion, actually

  • you wrap-up all the most important information, the most important points in a single paragraph.

  • Now, if you know a reason, if you believe that something is the cause for increased

  • values or dropped values or anything like that, now is the time to actually state your

  • opinion but only if this opinion is based on the information that you see in the diagram

  • not something you just think it could be from your own personal experience or something

  • like that, ok? You always base your opinion on the data that you see in the diagram. So,

  • here's what your notes could be for the conclusion: Now, so your notes could be -global financial

  • crisis results in dropping profits -only one company steadily increased. So, basically

  • you just conclude all your main points, for example you could say in your conclusion:

  • "To sum-up, the diagram shows that the international financial crisis has affected the majority

  • of the companies as/because.." and you move on by stating your own opinion. And now you're

  • ready to go and write that essay. Ideally, with enough practice this plan will be written

  • in no time you would be able to write it on the spot with some notes of yours, especially

  • if you practice enough. However, if you're just starting out it will prove very helpful

  • to actually fill that in, in more detail, before you write your essay. Ok, that's it

  • for today! Ask me your questions here or in Fb, T, G+ I've added all three links down

  • below in the description box, thank you very much for watching, good luck with your exam!

Hello everyone! Welcome to my channel! This is Dori I am a teacher of english and in today's

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